In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday, and not travel abroad on holiday, do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays most nations like to go on holiday. The reason that individuals
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wants
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release their busy life. In time to come, several communities will select to trip on vacation in their mother
provincial
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and they do not want to go overseas for a journey. I strongly agree with the above statement.
This
situation affected so many reasons. I would like to tell you two reasons, one thing is financial factors, and the other thing is covid situation changed
people
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minds. There for what are the reasons, and my opinion I am going to explain
further
paragraph with relevant example. On the one hand, the financial factor is a common reason for travel. Nowadays, all over the world face economic problems.
Therefore
, in society most of the time
people
spend less capital trying to have more fun. Usually, those who drive to another
country
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want cash in hand.
However
, if they are
traveling
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own
country
no need for more budgets.
For Instance
, when folk travel outside the
country
they want to spend much more fund, on air tickets, hotels, transportation, tax…etc.
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, if
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go
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on holiday own
country
they do not want to spend so much money. Because any
people
travel mother
country
there is no need to pay tourist tax
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and other things accommodations
also
can get
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price.
On the other hand
, covid situation is another factor nation ride to their
country
. At
this
moment society
,
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had a bad experience travelling overseas.
For instance
, some
people
go on a to journey another
country
. Unfortunately, someone faced covid diseases. Because of they die another
county
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. Afterwards,
population
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are very careful about their life.
Therefore
, in the future society will trip own
country
. In conclusion,
i
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strongly believe
in
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that future individuals will choose to
travels
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to their homey.
Due to
in my point of view, they will think about reasonable
price
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prices
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and a healthy environment.
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  • international travel
  • cultural exchange
  • national pride
  • affordability
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