In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday, and not travel abroad on holiday, do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays most nations like to go on holiday. The reason that individuals
Change the verb form
want
wants
release their busy life.
In time to come, several communities will select to trip on vacation in their mother Add the particle
towants
provincial
and they do not want to go overseas for a journey. I strongly agree with the above statement. Replace the word
province
This
situation affected so many reasons. I would like to tell you two reasons, one thing is financial factors, and the other thing is covid situation changed people
minds. There for what are the reasons, and my opinion I am going to explain Change noun form
people's
further
paragraph with relevant example.
On the one hand, the financial factor is a common reason for travel. Nowadays, all over the world face economic problems. Therefore
, in society most of the time people
spend less capital trying to have more fun. Usually, those who drive to another country
they
want cash in hand. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, if they are traveling
own Change the spelling
travelling
country
no need for more budgets. For Instance
, when folk travel outside the country
they want to spend much more fund, on air tickets, hotels, transportation, tax…etc. In addition
, if public
Correct article usage
the public
go
on holiday own Change the verb form
goes
country
they do not want to spend so much money. Because any people
travel mother country
there is no need to pay tourist tax,
and other things accommodations Remove the comma
apply
also
can get discount
price.
Add an article
a discount
the discount
On the other hand
, covid situation is another factor nation ride to their country
. At this
moment society,
had a bad experience travelling overseas. Remove the comma
apply
For instance
, some people
go on a to journey another country
. Unfortunately, someone faced covid diseases. Because of they die another county
. Afterwards, Correct your spelling
country
population
are very careful about their life. Correct article usage
the population
Therefore
, in the future society will trip own country
.
In conclusion, i
strongly believe Change the capitalization
I
in
that future individuals will choose to Change preposition
apply
travels
to their homey. Change the verb
travel
Due to
in my point of view, they will think about reasonable price
and a healthy environment.Fix the agreement mistake
prices
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