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Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wera. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #clothes #indication #wera
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IT HAS BEEN ARGUED THAT
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EXPERIMENT
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 ON
ANIMAL
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BRINGS HAS
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 POSITIVE AND NEGATIVE
SIDE
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. SOME PEOPLE AGREE WITH
THIS
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WHILE
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OTHER
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 DISAGREE WITH
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 STATEMENT.
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, THERE IS NOT ANOTHER ALTERNATIVE FOR SCIENTIST TO
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 THAN ANIMALS. THE EXPLANATION WILL BE PRESENTED
FURTHER
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 IN THE FOLLOWING ESSAY. A GROUP OF PEOPLE AGREE THAT WE SHOULD STOP USING
ANIMAL
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 FOR
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,
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 BECAUSE THEY BELIEVE THAT ANIMALS HAVE
FEELING
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. THEY CAN SUFFER LIKE HUMAN
BEING
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, THEY
ALSO
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RIGHT
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, THEY ARE ALLOWED TO LIVE AND FEEL FREE.
IN CONTRAST
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, ANOTHER HORDE OF PEOPLE SUPPORT THAT IT IS OKAY TO
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 THEM FOR SCIENTIFIC RESEARCH
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 BECAUSE IT IS BETTER TO KILL
ANIMAL
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 THAN
HUMAN
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HUMANS
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, WE WILL NOT FEEL GUILTY IF THE ANIMAL IS KILLED, IN CASE
IF
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THE
TRY OUT
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 IS FEIL. I AM TOTALLY CONVINCED THAT THERE IS NOT BETTER THAN ANIMAL TO BE USED FOR SCIENTIFIC DISCOVERY IN
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 WORLD, MANY SCIENTISTS ARE MAKING TREMENDOUS MEDICINE FOR HEALTH CARE, ANOTHER ASPECT IS AGRICULTURE AND TO KNOW THE PRODUCTION
IS WORK
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 OR NOT WE NEED TO
USE
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WHERE
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IN BIOLOGY, HUMAN IS
ALSO
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GROUP
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 OF ANIMAL, IT HAS BEEN PROVED THAT MONKEY HAS THE SAME GENE
WITH
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 HUMAN, WE
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CANNOT
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USE
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 FOR THE SAKE OF HUMAN BEING. TO SUPPORT OUR
LIVE
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 WHETHER IN HEALTHCARE OR IN AGRICULTURE WE NEED THE BEST PRODUCT AND IT NEEDS TO BE TESTED BEFORE SPREADING OUT TO MASS PRODUCTION.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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