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Many people believe that teachers and students in the classroom will no longer exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, human
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 without real interaction learning. As human
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 difficulties in learning when they go to Schools.
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daughters
doughters
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 that, there are many nations Suffering from
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difficulties
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internet
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people are
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but
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 2050 all states will have not schools and universities is not
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 about how the world has changed,
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 countries don'
t
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 to adopt
this
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 of a lack of technology. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, I don'
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that tutors and students will no longer exist in 2050. Because we still have nations that are Compelaing about
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internet
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as well as
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 proven that it
destructe
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destructive
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 human
beings
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developement
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development
 as our
brain
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 learn more from real interaction with each other.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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