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Writing task 2 Tourism today creates a variety of problems, such as pollution due to flights, transport and dirty water. Governments should impose extra taxes on flights or accommodation to restrict today's tourism industry.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is the influence of tourism on
the
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nature. Now people are beginning to realize that
government
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 should take measurements regarding
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tourism pollution. Personally, I tend to think that it is in
duties
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 of the state to handle obstacles in tourism.
Firstly
, it is well known that
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the touristic
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touristic
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 sphere uses all sorts of transport, which have a negative effect on
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. What
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 mean here is that the state does not care about pollution troubles caused by airplanes,
trains
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and trains
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. One of the main reasons behind that there
is
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 no restrictions held in order to prevent
the
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pollution. A good case in point is to set extra taxes for flights in order to invest
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 the improvement of
environment
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.
On the other hand
, it can
also
 be argued that changes in tax slab will drop the
overall
 growth in economics.
That is
 to
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 increasing the amount of tax for flights will affect
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its rise in price. Take
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 it will lead to the discontent
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 citizens. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that the implementation of
tariff
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 for flights will have a beneficial impact on
landscape
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.
Nevertheless
, people will complain about
over-priced
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 tickets.
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