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The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.

The pie charts below show units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France in 1980 and 2000.
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The pie charts illustrate the sections of fuel sources, coal, oil, natural
gas
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,
hydropower
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, and nuclear
power
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 in terms of electricity manufacturing in two separate countries, in 1980 and 2000. From the figures, it can be inferred that in
Australia
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, coal constitutes the highest
amount
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 of proportion in both years, whilst in
France
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 nuclear
power
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 represents the largest
units
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 in 2000.
Also
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, it is considerable that both coal and natural
gas
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 are responsible for the same number of contributions. Beginning with the highest proportion in 1980, when
Australia
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 produced 100
units
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 all of which coal made up half of all and natural
gas
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 comprised 20%,
this
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 production in
France
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 is precisely 25 and 25
units
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 of all, respectively.
In addition
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,
while
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hydropower
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 generated 20% in
Australia
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,
this
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 term is responsible for the lowest
amount
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 of fuels which is only 5
units
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 out of 90. In 2000, the
amount
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 of nuclear
power
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 in
France
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 rose significantly from 15 out of 90 to 126 out of 180
units
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.
In contrast
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, the
amount
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 of natural
gas
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 and
hydropower
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 declined to 2.
However
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, coal production remained the same number at 25.
On the other hand
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, in
Australia
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, both
hydropower
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 and coal increased to 36 and 130 respectively, which means
while
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Australia
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 relied on coal in 2000,
France
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 depended on nuclear
power
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gas, hydropower, power, australia, amount, france, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity production
  • Fuel source
  • Renewable sources
  • Non-renewable sources
  • Significant change
  • Evolved
  • Dominant source
  • Introduction of new sources
  • Reliance
  • Electricity production mix
  • Environmental implications
  • Future trend
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