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The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The bar chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying habits in five Australian cities. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The diagram describes the outcome of a survey of the human buying behaviour of
tea
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 and
coffee
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 from five different regions in Australia. The survey was collected from three types of
people
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, ones who brought fresh
coffee
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, ones who brought
instant
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coffee
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 and ones who went to a
coffee
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 or
tea
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 shop in the
last
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 four weeks.
Overall
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, most
people
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 from Sydney, Melbourne and Hobart prefer to have
coffee
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 or
tea
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 by visiting
coffee
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 or
tea
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 shops.
To begin
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, buying fresh
coffee
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 is the least choice of
people
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 in five Australian cities. In Sydney and Melbourne, the number of
people
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 buying fresh
coffee
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 was just about 40%.
While
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 in
Brisbane
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 and ,Adelaide the percentage dropped to around 35%.
Then
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, in
Hobart
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 the ratio has a slight rise to just below 40%. Purchasing
Instant
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coffee
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 is preferable for
people
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 from Adelaide, exactly 50% of
people
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 from the survey brought
instant
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coffee
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.
However
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, if compared to
Brisbane
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, Adelaide has fewer numbers than
Brisbane
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 but not too many, just a slight. The consumption of
Instant
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coffee
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 in
Brisbane
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 reached above 50% but most
people
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 of
Brisbane
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 still prefer to go to
coffee
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 or
tea
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 shops.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tea, coffee, people, instant, brisbane with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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