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ou are a member of an organisation which meets regularly at a particular restaurant. The most recent meal you had there was not satisfactory. Write a letter to the manager of the restaurant. In your letter explain why you are writing describe what went wrong with the meal and service suggest what the manager should do to ensure that you and your group return to the restaurant

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to complain about your restaurant and the unsatisfactory service I found yesterday.
Firstly
, I would like to inform you that I am a regular customer and my whole business members have lunch here most of the week. But, recently I found your restaurant's test not familiar like usually I have.
That is
 the reason I would like to express my views to you.
However
, I had a chicken curry with rice yesterday and tested like fus, which made me sick now.
In addition
, I
also
 noticed that your service is going a bit down towards the customer attention and sitting arrangement
also
 quite unusual.
Thus
, I would like to suggest you improvise in these circumstances that I and my business members had to face recently. I hope that when we return the next week it will be better service and fresh food. Yours faithfully, Hardik Mehta
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task response
Ensure that the purpose of the letter is immediately clear in the opening paragraph to better establish the context.
task response
Be specific when describing issues with the meal and service; provide concrete examples to clarify the problems encountered.
task response
Use polite and formal language consistently throughout the letter to maintain an appropriate tone.
coherence cohesion
Organize the content into clear paragraphs, each dealing with a separate aspect of the complaint for more effective coherence.
coherence cohesion
Use cohesive devices such as linking words and phrases to create a smooth flow between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Reiterate the main points in the concluding paragraph to reinforce your concerns and suggestions.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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