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The best way to reduce poverty in developing countries is by giving up to six years of free education so that they can at least read, write and use numbers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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A tuition-free pedagogy for six years is believed to be the most effective solution to combat impoverishment, equipping individuals with basic knowledge of numbers and words. Still, I totally disagree with
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 statement. First and foremost, free courses for a gap of 72 months could negatively impact social well-being. Particularly, not many educational institutions
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 the incurred problems of
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 and
lecturers
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 monthly
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, the tuition fee collected from students is used to pay for some necessities to ensure the operation of
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;
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, in some cases of deficit budget, schools might use the government's mortgage, whose money should be spent
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 public improvements, to support their pedagogical schemes.
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,
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 national funds for
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 services means less transformation for
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society, acting as an
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 for foreign investments to flow
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 the economy. Over the long period, famine will be more acute when there is limited monetary for social welfare.
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, there is no warrant that
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 approach can mitigate illiteracy. For certain reasons, if it is
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, the lesson designed for unprivileged students rarely covers all parts of the learning section. What it means is that it only mentions the fundamentals, but it is not enough for a person to prepare for the drastic changes in our society nowadays. Looking back to
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 decades, the world has gone through numerous transformations, requiring people to be wise and resourceful to adapt.
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, in order to overcome poverty, more elements should be considered, which are infrequently taught within free learning.
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, the aforementioned measures
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 dealing with
illiteracy
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 rate could be guaranteed in the
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. In conclusion, I firmly reckon that providing
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 instruction has limited the
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 lessening of poor and lack of skills because of the concerns about social status and teaching quality.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • poverty alleviation
  • functional literacy
  • numeracy skills
  • educational opportunity
  • employment prospects
  • critical thinking
  • empowerment
  • inequality reduction
  • sustainable development
  • innovation
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