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you have just spent a week with a friend on holiday, and when you got home, you realized that you have left your wallet in your friend's house. Write a letter to your friend; thanking for the holiday explaining that you left your wallet at their place providing instructions on how to send it back

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Dear Shreya, I am writing to let you know that I recently came back from holidays from your house. When I came back, I found that I
forgot
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had left
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 my wallet at your place. We had amazing well-planned holidays in Toronto. I enjoyed the panoramic view from
CN
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the CN
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 tower and
amazed
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was amazed
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 to see
view
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the view
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 from
top
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 which I had never experienced. I am very thankful to have you as a best friend who invited me for a holiday after
stressful
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a stressful
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 work schedule. Toronto was one of
places
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the places
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 on the bucket list. I was having my breakfast before my flight, I left my wallet just on the dining table. because I was in a hurry
as
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when
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 my Uber driver called that he arrived to pick me up. I paid Uber payment from a credit card which was directly connected to my bank account. but, I realised when I came back home and I went grocery shopping. I wonder if you can send my wallet with Jay, our school friend who lives near your house;he will come to visit me after 5 days. He will come to pick
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me up
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 from your house and
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tell
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 me when he will come to my home. Thank you for your help. Kind regards, Pooja Patel
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