Watching television has positive effects on children.Do you agree with the statement? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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watching
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in harmfully .
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kids .
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, everything if we use it more than limits has an opposite impact.
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children
who
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watching might be beneficial for
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,
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if the
parent
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control
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what they must watch. There are
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of educational channels which
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useful for kids and they can gain
several
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knowledge and
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them about values and
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lessons.
In addition
,
television
provides lessons that help
children
to improve
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school performance.
For instance
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represent
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television
can improve the thinking of
children
and how they behave with others .
However
,
television
gives families a particular
time
to spend together.
Secondly
, the harmful side
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television
, it may
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to behave as violence and crime addiction if they are watching
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those
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programe
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program
.
Initially
, they
become
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practise unpopular behaviour with
thier
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their
parent
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.
On the other hand
,
children
who spend
time
watching
television
may earn lower grades than those who watch less .
Television
time
reduces study
time
,so
children
do poorly in school.
To sum up
,
television
has
a
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negative and positive
effect
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whether in
children
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daily
life
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or in
thier
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their
schooling . In my
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it all depend on
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who can
make
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control
of
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watch
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television
for
children
.
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