IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Daily traffic seems to get worse on our roads. How can we reduce the number of cars on our roads today? What alternatives can we offer car drivers?

These days, there are plenty of machines on the city roads which cause heavy traffic.  In my opinion, there are two main factors that why
people
Use synonyms
use
Use synonyms
 their personal cars, on the one ,hand government offices and organizations and
on the other hand
Linking Words
 schools.  When
people
Use synonyms
 go to their offices to attend to their work or
use
Use synonyms
 their personal
vehicles
Use synonyms
 to take their children to and from school, there is it results in heavy traffic on the streets, and
people
Use synonyms
 think with their personal cars, they can manage their time and their money better.There are many ways to control traffic, but I can express three solutions here. 
First,
Linking Words
governments should provide online infrastructure for their services so that
people
Use synonyms
 do not need to leave their houses to pursue their requests and needs and can do their work at home.   In the
Second,
Linking Words
step, governments should not only develop common public transportation but
also
Linking Words
use
Use synonyms
 new and modern
vehicles
Use synonyms
such
Linking Words
 as electric scooters and bicycles. Governments should minimize the cost of using these devices and carefully monitor their movement timing. The third and most important step is to
use
Use synonyms
 mass advertising to attract the majority of
people
Use synonyms
 to
use
Use synonyms
 the modern form of transportation, and encourage especially teenagers to
use
Use synonyms
 the new
vehicles
Use synonyms
 when they want to go to school. 
Finally
Linking Words
,
To conclude
Linking Words
 it is possible to reduce the
use
Use synonyms
 of private
vehicles
Use synonyms
 through online services, new and free public transportation and advertising, which will not only reduce the number of cars on the streets but
also
Linking Words
, it will help clean the air.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: