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The maps show developments which took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.

The maps show developments which took place at the seaside resort of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
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The maps show developments which took place at the seaside
resort
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 of Templeton between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
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, a comparison
oh
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of
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 the two maps reveals a change from a largely rural to
a
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an
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 urban landscape. In 1990, the sea
resort
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 was a much greener residential
are
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area
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 with a large number of
trees
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 and individual houses, but during the next 15
years
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,years
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 the beach
resort
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 experienced a number of dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that all of the
trees
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 north of the sea were cut down, with all the houses along the railway line being knocked down and replaced by apartment houses.
Moreover
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, a new industrial estate with
supermarket
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a supermarket
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, factory and ferry sprang up on the territory of the
resort
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.  Only
few
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a few
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trees
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 north of the sea remained.
Further
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 developments were
construction
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the construction
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 of
factory
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factories
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instead
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 of
trees
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 and residential hoses.  A ferry was
also
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 built between
railway
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the railway
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 and the coast.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort, trees with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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