This graph demonstrate the information about tourists to England who came to see four diffrent attractions in Brighton.

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the information about tourists to England who came to see four

diffrent

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different

attractions in Brighton. There are four primary attractions

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has the most huge spread

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tourists.

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gallery,Pavilion,Pier,

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and Festival

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and each of them offer

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sort of entertainment. The peak of

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1995 and

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peak has been gained by Pavilion.

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visitings increased from 25% to 49% and

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to 31 % in 2010.

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at least to 15% in 1995,

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visitors

went up gradually to 25% in 2010. What about the rest two attractions?Art

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imposing 38% quantity of

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in 1985

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has obtained the most stable quantity of

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we can notice that the most

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