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Instructions Read the question below and write an opinion essay.
You should spend no more than 40 minutes on this task.
Remember to write down a clear thesis statement followed by your essay plan.
Only then attempt to write this essay. One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles.
Do you think this is a feasible solution?

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Nowadays heavy traffic is one of the big challenges faced by any nation. One way to overcome the traffic congestion complication is to impose a tax on personal vehicles. In my opinion, there are other ways to figure out
this
 dispute which are suggested in
this
 essay with relevant examples. In transportation, a trucking vehicle is a major tool by which all countries can provide necessary items like food and petroleum. Private transport is
also
 important for commuting to different places like workplaces, marketplaces and study institutes. More vehicles on the road create a serious problem of traffic overrun. There are some obvious solutions to reduce
this
. First of all, increasing the toll tax on premium motors can help.
For example
, a higher price rate the market harsh for buyers who actually purchase
this
 for just fun, which ultimately helps to control transit issues.
Secondly
,
due to
 the reduced purchasing power of the individual, they may turn to the public transport system.
However
, they create problems for the individual to buy affordable personal motorcycles and scooters for people. The impact of high charges may ruin the automobile industry. One of the best examples is COVID-19. After the pandemic situation, major countries imposed heavy taxes on motor mechanic vehicles to revive their economies, which led to a recession in the industry. The other solution is to motivate people to use more public modes of transport.
Further
, the government should provide good facilities in buses and run concession schemes for ladies and students.
In addition
, sharing is
also
 an effective option.
To conclude
, In my ,opinion rather than increasing the tax burden on the public, the adoption of other public transit systems is an attractive way to overcome the problem.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • **Traffic congestion**: The heavy build-up of vehicles on roadways, leading to slower speeds and longer trip times.
  • **Disincentive**: A factor, usually a financial penalty or restriction, that discourages a particular behavior or action.
  • **Public transportation**: Systems of buses, trains, subways, and other forms of transportation that operate on a scheduled basis and are available to the general public.
  • **Greenhouse gas emissions**: Gases released into the atmosphere from vehicles, factories, and other sources that contribute to the greenhouse effect and global warming.
  • **Carpooling**: The practice of sharing a car ride with one or more people to reduce the number of vehicles on the road.
  • **Telecommuting**: Working remotely, often from home, using digital communication tools instead of commuting to a physical workspace.
  • **Revenue**: The income generated from taxation or other sources that can be used by governments for public projects.
  • **Equity**: Fairness or justice in the way people are treated, often with a focus on ensuring equal opportunities for all individuals.
  • **Infrastructure**: The physical and organizational structures needed for the operation of a society, including transportation systems, communication networks, and utilities.
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