More and more people want to buy clothes , cars and other items with famous brand . What are the reason ? Is it positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, through the improvement of society and the expand a lot of
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brand
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brands
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in the market with large
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promotions
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,
people
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tend to buy logo
clothes
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,cars and other items.As it brings positive and negative
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live.
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or negative
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? These days in our development community there are many reason leads
people
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to buy high
brand
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belong to
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class
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, they can buy any expensive material
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also
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to represent their lives as the able.
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that using and wearing
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clothes
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it
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comesout
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comes out
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high
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weraing
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and
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famous
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brand
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can create
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treatment
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for women. It
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as
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a positive point as some
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have
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to live
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life
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they are able to buy.
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can not live without entertainment,as they
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buying
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clothes
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,cars and even phones is one of most happiest
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and charges
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, there is a negative
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on
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high material, poor
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feel they are unable to live same other
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, as it
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a
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sense in
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the differences
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between
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nations.
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people
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cause distinct
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life
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as they are not able to be like the
upper
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class
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family .
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, the development of
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the community
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the
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from upper and lower
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class
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classes
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can
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creates
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a gap between them.In my opinion,
brand
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clothes
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means
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high quality production so, if anyone
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to buy
it
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why not
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