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More and more people want to buy clothes , cars and other items with famous brand . What are the reason ? Is it positive or negative development?

#people #clothes #cars #items #brand #reason #development
Nowadays, through the improvement of society and the expand a lot of
brand
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brands
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 in the market with large
promotion
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promotions
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,
people
 tend to buy logo
clothes
,cars and other items.As it brings positive and negative
result
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results
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 in
individuals
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 live.
This
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 coming
paragraphs
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 will highlight what are the
reson
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reason
of
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this
 habit
?
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And is it
positive
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a positive
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 or negative
trends
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? These days in our development community there are many reason leads
people
 to buy high
brand
.
first
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 of all ,
the
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they
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are
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belong to
class
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a class
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 family
however
, they can buy any expensive material
also
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apply
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to represent their lives as the able.
In addition
, some
people
argues
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 that using and wearing
brand
clothes
it
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apply
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comesout
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comes out
come out
 with
hidh
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high
 quality.
As a
result
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weraing
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wearing
clothes
 from
certain
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the certain
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and
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apply
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famous
brand
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brands
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 can create
physical
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a physical
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 treatment
especially
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,especially
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 for women. It
consider
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is considered
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as
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apply
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a positive point as some
nation
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nations
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 have
passion
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a passion
the passion
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to live
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for living
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 a
luxuries
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luxurious
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 life
otherwise
 they are able to buy.
For instance
,nation from
upperclassman
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upperclassmen
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 can not live without entertainment,as they
found
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find
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 buying
brand
clothes
,cars and even phones is one of most happiest
source
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sources
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 and charges
thier
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their
 energy .
On the other hand
 , there is a negative
affect
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effect
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 on
consumes
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consuming
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 high material, poor
people
 feel they are unable to live same other
people
, as it
make
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makes
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a
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apply
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sense in
differences
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the differences
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 between
two
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the two
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 nations.
As a result
people
 from
lower
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the lower
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class
 cause distinct
their
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in their
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life
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lives
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 as they are not able to be like the
upper
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class
 family .
To conclude
, the development of
community
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the community
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 has a positive and negative impact
in
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on
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 the
people
 from upper and lower
class
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classes
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can
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and can
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creates
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 a gap between them.In my opinion,
brand
clothes
means
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mean
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 high quality production so, if anyone
able
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is able
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 to buy
it
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them
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 why not
.
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