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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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As a result
 of limited land, governments in many countries chose to improve public
transport
 systems
such
 as buses and train facilities,
instead
 of building new
roads
.
Although
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 providing more
roads
 in the city may resolve heavy traffic in some areas, I firmly believe that the benefits of enhancing public
transport
 systems outweigh the downsides.
To begin
 with, providing reliable and better public
transport
 will tremendously benefit the city in many ways.
First,
it can reduce traffic jams in many areas. People will likely commute by bus or local trains
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 when these facilities are easy to access, cheap, and comfortable.
As a result
, the number of cars on the road is reduced,
therefore
, easing the traffic. On top of that, the air quality in cities with reliable public
transport
 will improve, as emissions from cars lower. A recent survey shows that Surabaya which is one of the biggest cities in Indonesia has a very low pollution index, which is indicated by green colour,
whereas
 the neighbouring cities like Malang and Gresik have a very high pollution index. I believe that
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this
 is mainly correlated with the reliable public
transport
 that Surabaya has.
Further
 advantages of improving public
transport
 are efficiency and humanity aspects. Unlike building new
roads
that
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 likely to destroy trees and relocate houses, investing in public
transport
 will have a limited effect on the environment and is very unlikely to relocate people's houses. Indeed, the first option would be much preferable to the second as it is cheaper and more friendly to the public. In conclusion, despite the benefit that may be gained from building new
roads
, I vehemently believe that the positives of improving public
transport
 supersede the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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