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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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A glance at the two tables provided reveals a stark comparison of the temperatures and hours of daylight between
Mumbai
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 and
Moscow
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, counted in degrees and time in May 2007.
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, the
temperature
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 in
Mumbai
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 was much greater than that in
Moscow
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while
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 daylight duration in
Moscow
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 was much longer than that of
Mumbai
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. In terms of the temperatures,
Mumbai
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 and
Moscow
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 had several differences. Regarding
temperature
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 in
Mumbai
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, the lowest
temperature
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 was stable at 29°
C
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 on Friday and Sunday whilst Saturday was the hottest day with 35°
C
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. Meanwhile, the range of
temperature
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 in
Mumbai
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 was quite stable, and that of
Moscow
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 was greatly erratic. As for the
temperature
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 in
Moscow
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,
although
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 the maximum
temperature
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 remained from 8°
C
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 to 10°
C
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 during the weekend, the minimum
temperature
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 was erratic. The lowest
temperature
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 on Friday started at 4 and sharply accelerated to 9°
C
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, after that it dipped to 3°
C
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 and it was the coldest day. Concerning daylight duration, the period of daytime in
Mumbai
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 was 10 hours
while
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 that in
Moscow
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 was 18 hours, which was much longer.
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, the sun in
Mumbai
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 rose at exactly 6 a.
m
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 and set at around 4 p.
m
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,
Moscow
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 started at around 5 a.
m
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 and ended at over 10 p.
m
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.
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