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Many men and women are making the decision to have children later in life. Why is this trend occurring? What are the impacts of this development on both family and society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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A glance at the two tables provided reveals a stark comparison of the temperatures and hours of daylight between
Mumbai
 and
Moscow
, counted in degrees and time in May 2007.
Overall
, the
temperature
 in
Mumbai
 was much greater than that in
Moscow
while
 daylight duration in
Moscow
 was much longer than that of
Mumbai
. In terms of the temperatures,
Mumbai
 and
Moscow
 had several differences. Regarding
temperature
 in
Mumbai
, the lowest
temperature
 was stable at 29°
C
 on Friday and Sunday whilst Saturday was the hottest day with 35°
C
. Meanwhile, the range of
temperature
 in
Mumbai
 was quite stable, and that of
Moscow
 was greatly erratic. As for the
temperature
 in
Moscow
,
although
 the maximum
temperature
 remained from 8°
C
 to 10°
C
 during the weekend, the minimum
temperature
 was erratic. The lowest
temperature
 on Friday started at 4 and sharply accelerated to 9°
C
, after that it dipped to 3°
C
 and it was the coldest day. Concerning daylight duration, the period of daytime in
Mumbai
 was 10 hours
while
 that in
Moscow
 was 18 hours, which was much longer.
On the other hand
, the sun in
Mumbai
 rose at exactly 6 a.
m
 and set at around 4 p.
m
,
Moscow
 started at around 5 a.
m
 and ended at over 10 p.
m
.
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