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The pie chart illustrates total usage of transport and car in Edmonton. Meanwhile, the table gives information of people's reasons for using the car in city.

The pie chart illustrates total usage of transport and car in Edmonton. Meanwhile, the table gives information of people's reasons for using the car in city.
#usage #transport #car #edmonton #information #people #city
The pie chart illustrates
total
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the total
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 usage of transport and
car
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cars
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 in Edmonton. Meanwhile, the table gives information
of
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about
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 people's reasons for using the
car
 in
city
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the city
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.
Overall
, almost half
rate
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the rate
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 of what transport is in use
is
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apply
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prevails
to
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apply
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car
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the car
a car
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 with 45 per cent,
additionally
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,additionally
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car
 is widely
using
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used
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 for
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the commute
a commute
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commute
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commuting
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 to work. The LRT
is have
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has
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 slightly less range of use with just under 10 per cent in
compare
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comparison
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 to
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the car
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car
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cars
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.
By contrast
, there are
bus
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buses
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 and
taxi
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taxis
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 that have
a
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apply
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similar lowest grades with 10 per cent. Another option could be
table
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a table
the table
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 that shows that
go
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going
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 to business and taking children to school
is
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apply
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clearly
have
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has
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 just under a half proportion in comparison to commuting to work.
As well as
, shopping and leisure activities that possess the poorest percentage of people's reasons for using the
car
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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