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The table provides information about people's reason for using the car in city, with the pie chart showing on transport and car use in Edmonton.

The table provides information about people's reason for using the car in city, with the pie chart showing on transport and car use in Edmonton.
#information #people #reason #car #city #transport #edmonton
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The table provides information about people's
reason
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reasons
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 for using the
car
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 in
city
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the city
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, with the pie chart showing
on
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apply
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transport and
car
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 use in Edmonton. As can be seen from the table,
most
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the most
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reason
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common reason
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 for using the
car
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 is to commute to work(55%).
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, the next cases of
car
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 use are almost the same percentages.
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, just under
a
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half(45%) belongs to
business
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a business
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.
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this
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, forty per
cent
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 be owned by taking children to school.
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, the lowest proportion on
this
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 list were
taken
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leisure activities and shopping. They have just fifteen per
cent
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. Other conveyance ,
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, LRT is rated just under one-third(35%). A small proportion (10 per
cent
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) of people prefer bus and taxi.
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, all
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this
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 activities were used by
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car
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the car
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. It is the vast majority of all transport (45per
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cent
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per cent
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) .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words car, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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