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The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of

The line graph shows the number of books borrowed from four libraries in the mouths of June, July, August and September of
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The line graph shows the number of
books
 borrowed from four libraries in the
mouths
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months
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 of June, July, August and September of 2014. The pie chart represents the percentage of
books
 that were borrowed in different types. As
i
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 presented, the highest
numbers
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number
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 of
book
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books
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which
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apply
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borrowed by people about 300 to be precise, from Ryeslip in June 2014. The Sutton Wood library stood as the second highest lender of
books
 with 250 renting which after 3
mouths
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go
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 up to 300. West Eaton and Church Mount transmit 50
books
 each in June 2014.
Inerestingly
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Interestingly
, the number of
book
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books
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 readers borrowed from Ryeslip library,
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of
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over the next three
mouths
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months
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 and in September remained
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 over 150
books
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readers. Significant variations were noticed in the
book
 lending pattern of Sutton Wood. It supplied
to
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the lowest number of
books
 in August (100) and the highest in September (300). The most popular
types
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type
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 of
books
 borrowed was fiction 43
percent
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per cent
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. The second
favorite
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 of
book
 types was biology 19
percent
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per cent
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. The history and science
accordingly
 stood
14
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percent
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per cent
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. The least popular
is
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are
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 self-help
books
,
only
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with only
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 10
percent
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, book, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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