The line graph below represents the percentage of tourists to Engalnd who visited four different

The line graph below represents the percentage of tourists to Engalnd who visited four different
The line graph below represents the percentage of tourists to
Engalnd
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England
who visited four different Brighton attractions between 1980 and 2010. As we see, in 1980 and 2010 the most popular leisure
activites
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activities
were the Pavilion and the Festival. In 1980 the least popular
attraction
was the Pier,
however
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in 2010
this
had changed and the Art gallery became the least popular one. During the 1980s and
1985s
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there was a huge amount of
visitors
who wanted to visit the Art gallery. The percentage of
visitors
had changed from 22% to 38%.
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happened to the Pavilion, but in another time period. In
1980s
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it was a pretty popular
attraction
, but in 1985 and 1995
visitors
suddenly increased from 26% to almost 50%.
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of
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the Pier
also
fluctuated
from
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1980 and 2005,
then
it had
rised
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risen
raised
and significantly made the Art gallery the worst
between
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all Brighton attractions. On the whole, all Brighton
attraction
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had a lot of changes. For the whole period Festival
had
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experienced a bit of fluctuations, and it was the most peaceful one.It ended the year up as the
second best
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attraction
in England.
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