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The graph below presents the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building production.

The graph below presents the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building production.
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The graph below presents the process by which
bricks
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 are manufactured for
the
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apply
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building production. First of all,
digger
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the digger
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is claimed
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claims
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 some metal grid. From
this
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, the metal grid is gone to
roller
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the roller
a roller
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, which contains one process with two
option
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options
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of
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for
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 making
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bricks
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brick
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 forms. But before it has to get flirtation with sand and water. After that, the mixture goes to
wire
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a wire
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 cutter or mould, where it gets
his
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its
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 form.
As a result
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, the combination goes to
drying
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a drying
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 oven for 24-48 hours. When the drying is over, all of
that
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the
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 dried
bricks
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is
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are
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 gone for
kiln
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the kiln
a kiln
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 to get heat.
There's
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There are
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 two levels of heating,
first
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the first
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 one is
uses
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used
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 to moderate. It needs
atleast
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at least
 200 degrees
celsius
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Celsius
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 to 980 degrees. The second one has
higher
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a higher
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 heating standard from 870 degrees to 1300. Following that, the heated material
is
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apply
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ought to get to
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber for 48-72 hours. The
bricks
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subsquently
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subsequently
gets
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get
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 cooler and
its
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it's
it is
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 ready for packaging and goes
to
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apply
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delivery. The quality of
stone
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the stone
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 is elaborate because every harmful
products
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product
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 are removed and blocks will not break in fact
its
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it's
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 heated several times.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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