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The table below gives information about the underground railway Systems in six cities.

The table below gives information about the underground railway Systems in six cities.
#information #railway #systems #six #cities
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 information about
subway
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 ways in different towns.
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older
subway
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 system in
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London
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 was
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 in 1868
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route
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total (394 kilometres). In one
year
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this
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 in London
ussing
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using
 775
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million
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 people. By applying the contrast,
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railway
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 in Tokyo which was opened in 1927
year
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have
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 considerably more
client
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clients
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 in one
year
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 1 927
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 passengers.
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the railway
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 in Tokyo
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third
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 of the total
route
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 there are 155
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way
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.
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 in Kyoto it
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 just 11 kilometres.
Subway
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 in Kyoto was
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 in 1981
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delivered
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pessengers
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passengers
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.  In
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conclusion
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table
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compare
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 that most older
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railway
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railways
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bigger
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route
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routes
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,
while
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subway
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the subway
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 in Tokyo most popular
from
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 the nation.
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case
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is in Kyoto.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subway, year, route, railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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