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These days it is much easier for many people to travel to different countries for tourism than in the past. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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There is a growing number of tourists
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 to other countries than before. Some people believe it is a positive development
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 others hold the opposite point of view. I agree with the former, and in the following paragraphs, I am going to explain why the advantages are greater than the disadvantages. First and foremost, more and more foreigners are
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 to other nations,
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 can bring a good economic income for a country. When a nation’s economy increases, their citizens’ lives may have an upward change.
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, the unemployment rate has declined because many tourist companies need residents who are familiar with local cultures to be their tour guides.
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 to say, these guilders can reduce a lot of pressure on income.
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, visitors’ biases and stereotypes toward the local dwellers may be reduced after they understand a nation’s culture deeply.
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, some hold opposite opinions. To illustrate, buildings or public places may be devastated by immoral visitors.
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, language barriers may
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 cause some violent issues in foreign countries.
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, these problems can be solved in different ways.
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,
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 unacceptable
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 can be restricted by high payment of fines.
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, these people can be prohibited by the government from coming into the states. In conclusion, a state’s economic pressures, unemployment rate, and bias problems can be solved by growing numbers of foreign
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.
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, conflicts and devested buildings need to be considered.
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, the profits are greater than the drawbacks.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • boost local economies
  • cultural exchange
  • mutual understanding
  • environmental degradation
  • deforestation
  • overcrowding
  • commodification
  • authentic cultural experiences
  • revenue
  • perspective
  • globalization
  • sustainable tourism
  • heritage sites
  • local customs
  • appreciation of diversity
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