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Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions. Do you agree or disagree?

#libraries #waste #money #computer #technology #functions
functions. Do you agree or disagree? In the current era, it is becoming increasingly popular opinion among
people
 which is treating public
libraries
is
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unnecessary
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an unnecessary
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act
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even
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waste
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a waste
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 of money
due to
 advancement
technology
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in technology
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 on
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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 are able to replace their functions. In
this
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 I have
different
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a different
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 state
which is
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required
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 comfortable public
libraries
 for citizens.
This
 essay will discuss the reason maintaining public
libraries
 is essential and provide
feasible
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 example. Let’s start by looking at the computer
technology
 cannot change public
libraries
.
Although
,
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 some
people
 argue that its wasting expenses for maintaining public
libraries
due to
 the advancement of
technology
offer
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electronic
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an electronic
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 library which can access
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the source
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 of
book
, some
people
 go to
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the library
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for
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requiring
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comfortable
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a comfortable
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 zone to read. Take
Japan
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Japan's
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 government as an example, to keep inhabitants
convy
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convey
by
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 reading activities, the government state
on
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 renovating
libraries
 is one of the priorities
Japan’s
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 program.
Thus
, it is undeniable that it’s a good approach for improving public
libraries
.
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 another reason why public
libraries
 should
renovate
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 even though
people
 can access
book
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books
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 in online
library
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libraries
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.
While
people
 need
comfortable
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a comfort
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 zone, it is not all
book
genre
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genres
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 can be accessed
by
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online.
For instance
, some manuscripts which is come from old age
that
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 is essential sources for some scientist,
it
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apply
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cannot be transformed at
E-library
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an E-library
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, because the material is easily
to broke
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broken
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.
Hence
, it can be denied that
nation
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 should maintain public
libraries
 to
safe
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 the old sources. In conclusion, I believe that
although
 computer
technology
 can give a modern feature to access
source
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sources
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 of
book
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books
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, it is necessary for government to renovate public
libraries
. In fact, the main reasons are
for creating
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 a comfortable zone to read and
for saving
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the
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old
source
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sources
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 like
manuscript
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manuscripts
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that
is
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cannot be transformed
to
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into
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online
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the online
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 system.
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