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People nowadays prefer to interact online (e.g. do shopping, chat with friends) rather than talking to other people face-to-face. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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These days, there is an increase in the number of
people
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 who make interaction on the internet
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 as
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 shopping or communicating with colleagues,
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 of interacting with other
individuals
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 in
person
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. In my view, it is convenience that encourages
people
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 to do almost everything online.
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,
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 is a negative impact which can affect our social lives in the long run. On the one hand, the main reason for these
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 is ease and flexibility, so it makes
individuals
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 do a variety of activities on the
internet
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.
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, cyber-shopping provide many option of products that
people
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 can observe what products that suitable for them since they do not need to go outside and spend a lot of time buying some goods.
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, meeting someone on the internet is preferred by
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 because there are introverted
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 who feel safe and comfortable when they communicate with other friends on social media.
On the other hand
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, the negative effect
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 these
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 may harm
people
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 in the long term. To illustrate,
individuals
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 who frequently buy something or chat with some friends in the virtual world and rarely go outside which go outside makes them do some exercise and direct interaction.
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, if these
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 are prolonged to do by
people
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, it will reduce their health level as they seldom do outside activities.
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,
people
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 who prefer to communicate with friends on social media may lose their social lives in the neighbourhood, and
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 lose their communication skills to make
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person
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 relationships with others. In conclusion, nowadays
people
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 who like doing most of their activities in the virtual world may find it difficult to start
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in-person
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person
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 relationships, and feel any health problems
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 if these
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 are prolonged. I believe
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 issue must be aware by each
person
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due to
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 the negative effect in the long term.
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