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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree?

#someone #luck
Can we really rely on
luck
 to achieve success? Some people believe that achieving your dream is mostly
due to
 the help of
luck
. In
this
, essay I will discuss in detail why depending on
luck
 alone cannot bring you far.
Firstly
, there is truth to the saying , "Do your best and God will do the rest". I believe that
this
 is suitable for everybody. A person must strive to attain his goals in life.
For example
, between 2 students.
one
 who studies hard,
while
 the other
one
 is doing the opposite and just relying on his
luck
 to pass the examination. The high probability is that the student who did not study
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 failed his exam. Another example is for those people who are simply relying on and playing the game of chance, like TOTO in Singapore. Relying on
luck
 alone to be rich but not doing any crucial action to be successful is a tragedy.
Instead
 of working for a better
future
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 they are simply relying on a tangible belief. Working hard for something and achieving it can boost
one
's confidence and will make you treasure
this
 achievement more because you persevere for it.
On the other hand
, it must be really
luck
 that played its hand, that made you suddenly win the lottery.
However
, the reality is harsh and easy money won't
last
 long. There are stories that made them
one
 day millionaires but never really
last
 long.
To conclude
, I believe that possessing the determination to strive for what you want in life is far more effective than relying on
luck
that is
 not reliable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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