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The table compares the morning and afternoon time spent by British people who have no jobs between two genders last year.

The table compares the morning and afternoon time spent by British people who have no jobs between two genders last year.
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The table compares the morning and
afternoon
time
 spent by British people who
have
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had
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 no jobs between
two
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the two
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 genders
last
 year. It is clear from the statistics that unemployed
women
 liked to dedicate themselves to housework throughout the day,
while
 unemployed
men
 mostly spent their
time
 looking for jobs in the morning and watching TV in the
afternoon
. Housework occupied nearly half the unemployed population of
women
 in the morning, and slightly over
one fifth
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one-fifth
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of
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apply
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in the
afternoon
.
By contrast
, less than 20% of
men
 spent
time
 doing housework. Shopping counted
for
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as
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 the second most popular activity for
women
, with a figure of 26% in the morning and 17% in the
afternoon
. For
men
 without jobs, job hunting was the main priority, with the highest figure of 22% in the morning and
relatively
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 high figure of 12%, compared with that among
women
 at only 16% and 13% respectively. In the
afternoon
,
men
favored
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favoured
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 TV and gardening. Some of the least
prefered
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preferred
 activities of both
men
 and
women
 during
day
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the
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time
include
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included
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 drinking, playing
sport
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sports
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 and visiting town.
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