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The best way to learn about other culture is to work in a multinational organization do you agree or Disagree

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It cannot be denied that in the contemporary era,
people
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 are very much curious about the culture and customs of different parts of the world. Some commentators are of the view that if someone wants to know about the customs and heritage of other countries, they have to be a part of a multinational company,
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, others do not. I
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 support the perspective that
people
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 do not need to be service holders of international companies to be aware of foreign cultures and it is not a convenient approach. From an
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 point of view, There are several reasons that justify that
people
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 do not need to work in a multinational group to learn about others.
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, it is an era of
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the Internet
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. So it is very convenient to use different websites and social media
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 as Facebook,
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 to learn about foreign languages and cultural activities.
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, it is highly tough and competitive to secure a job in a multinational company. Though
people
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 can earn a significant amount of money and receive various facilities, it is unnecessary to look for a multinational job to become aware of other's way of living. We are living in an era of globalization. That's why if anyone has so much passion and curiosity for different cultures and traditions, he or she can become a tourist and without a doubt, it is the best possible way to know foreign culture.
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, tourists can visit different countries and explore the diversity of the world.
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, working in the multinational sector has so much work pressure.
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,
people
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 do not have time to invest in other activities like exploring cultural aspects of other societies. In conclusion, securing a job in a multinational company is beneficial for personal life,
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, it is not necessary to pursue the passion of learning other cultures.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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