Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Do you agree or disagree?

Previously, in the time of our ancestors leading
life
was very simple.
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of facilities for the new generation, it is being witnessed,
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that they
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have had a lot of choices in their lives
such
as choosing new ways for income, new fields of study, etc. In
this
essay, I will explain the reason
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agreeing to
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statement.
To begin
with, from different
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it has been observed that people taking risks are always more successful as
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to
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that don’t.
Furthermore
, they become
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for youngsters and teenagers
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them tend to be like them
,
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and have
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that no matter what happens they will always have opportunities in their
life
.
For instance
, the owner of KFC. He was in his early 60’s when he became successful in establishing a giant brand.
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, with the boost in technology people sitting at home can have knowledge regarding different fields and can look for
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pros and cons and choose
accordingly
For example
, Mr. James a famous author in Australia who has too much interest in MBBS, later went for Literature.
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Although
,
this
is true that we have a lot of choices in
this
world.
Nevertheless
, we should never forget that our
life
is limited and someday we all have to die. So, no doubt we should always make decisions as per our choice but should try to stick to that and excel in that in order to enjoy
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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