The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

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The given bar graph illustrates

the households proportion

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the proportion of the household

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in various homes located in England and Wales from

year

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the year

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1918 till 2011.

Overall

, we observe from 1918 till 2001 the ratio of people living on rent is decreasing.

Whereas

individuals purchasing their own residence is increasing.

Initially

, in 1918 almost 80% of citizens preferred to live in

rent

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rented

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houses.

However

, between 1939 and 1953

this

dropped

down

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to 69%.

Furthermore

, in 1971 it decreased to 50%. With the passage of time, households opting for rented places from 1981 till 2001, the trend went

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downwards (average 35%). In comparison, if we look at the percentage of owned

residentials

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residents

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. From 1918

till

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1953 it was between 20% – 30%. In later years,

this

was increasing

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with

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40 % in 1961, 60% in 1981 and nearly 70% in 1991 and 2001.

While

, in 2011,

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decreased

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decrease

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was

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witnessed.

Ass

ASS

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1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

155 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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Topic Vocabulary:

ownership
tenancy
trend
fluctuation
proportion
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dwelling
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transition
migration
fluctuate
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The chart shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011

In the future, robots will do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have more advantages or disadvantages?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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