Some countries achieve international sports by building specialized facilities to train top athlets, insteadproviding sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development.

Some governments provide modernized equipment and infrastructure
facilities
that are only available for top
athletes
to achieve international
sports
competitions.
However
, every sportsperson can access these
facilities
. I believe
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this
is a positive development for the
country
and sportspersons. First of all, Constructing
sports
institutes in a specific place for well-trained
athletes
is more beneficial than building all over the places in
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country
, because the government should spend higher expenditure on every institute maintenance
such
as light and water, and international trainers. If training is provided all the places consume more and more money. So , training only top
athletes
is positive,
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illustrate, many developing countries establish sporting centres in the capital city for trained international
athletes
, Olympic
players
, and cricket contestants,
this
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to, every player being carefully watched and
get training
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by individual trainers so
players
become top
athletes
.
Secondly
, many authorities provide
sports
facilities
in every school and university, that everyone can use. A number of schools and universities appoint at least one
sports
trainer, who trains the students and can select the best
players
for
sports
competitions
such
as the district, provincial and national levels. So that, no need construct
facilities
all over the area. ,
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Moreover
if top
athletes
achieve in international competition, the
country
becomes more popular and gets rewarded
hence
training only the best
players
is positive for nations.
For example
, in India Prakjanantha became famous in chess competitions at in age of 20
as a result
India
also
became popular in chess.
To conclude
, establishing specialized equipment and
facilities
for only international
players
is beneficial for the
country
because reduces the expenditure and the nation becomes popular.

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