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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The chart illustrates how society spent their weekly salary at the time of 1968
compare
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 to 2018. It is noticed that in 1968
population
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the population
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 spent the majority of their salary
in
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 food by 35 %. Followed by housing, clothing and
footware
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footwear
 by 10 %. The other items,
such
 as household goods, personal goods, and transport, are spent
by
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5% of their income weekly.
Additional
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, leisure is in around 9 % of their bills. The
last
 thing that they spent money
in
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 was
in
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fuel and power.
On the other hand
, 2018 shows a
drastically
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drastic
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 decrease in
percentage
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the percentage
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 of money spent weekly
in
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 important items.
For example
, food was reduced by almost 15% of their
spendings
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spending
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. But, leisure was increased by 12 %, and housing by 9 %. The other topics
kept
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were
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 almost the same.
To conclude
, seems like nowadays families are wasting more money
in
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 leisure and housing than
in
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 food which it's very important
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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