The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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shows about Change the determiner
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percentage
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households
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of Correct article usage
the Number
hour
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hours
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housework per Change preposition
of
week
, per household between 1920 and 2019.
In the first chart washing machine. Use synonyms
Refrigerator
. Use synonyms
Vacuum
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cleaner
all rise from 1920 to 2019. Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
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Refrigerator
and Fix the agreement mistake
Refrigerators
Vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
increase
faster than washing Use synonyms
machine
. In 1920, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
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Refrigerator
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the Refrigerator
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households
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the Refrigerator
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was
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households
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increase
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increased
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percentage
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household
. Washing machine is to Fix the agreement mistake
households
percantage
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percentage
households
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however
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increase
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about
15 Change preposition
by about
percantage
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percentage
at
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in
households
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mashine
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machine
is
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were
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by Correct your spelling
covered
Pefrigerator
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Refrigerator
Vacuum
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cleaner
in 1940 and 1960. Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
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Vacuum
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The vacuum
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was
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by Pefrigerator in 1942.
In the second chart Houses per Correct your spelling
covered
week
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Number
of hours per Use synonyms
week
, but it decline to 10 Use synonyms
Number
of hours per Use synonyms
week
in 2019.
Over Use synonyms
than
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then
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the percentang
percentang
of Correct your spelling
percentage
households
with Use synonyms
electical
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electrical
appliance
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appliances
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increase
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increased
however
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Number
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of
per Change preposition
apply
week
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decline
from 1920 to 2019.Wrong verb form
declined
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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