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The supplied pie charts above represents the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France.

The supplied pie charts above represents the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about units of electricity production by fuel source in Australia and France.
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supplied
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pie charts above
represents
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 the data collected in 1980 and 2000, about
units
 of
electricity
production
 by fuel source in
Australia
 and
France
.
Overall
, the total
production
 increased.
However
, both countries developed ecologically clear
source
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sources
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 of
energy
such
nuclear
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as nuclear
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 and
hydro power
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hydropower
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. As can be seen in the chart in 1980 exactly half of
electricity
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the electricity
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 of
Australia
received
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was received
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 from coal which consists
50
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of 50
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unit
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units
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 of
production
. At the same
time
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energy
 gained by
France
 from coal was only
one
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four of
total
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the total
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 sum.
At the end
 of
20th
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the 20th
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 century as
many
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 natural gas as hydro power
used
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was used
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 for
electricity
 in
Australia
.
However
,
oil
 sources
are
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provide only
10units
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10 units
from
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of
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Australia
’s
production
,
while
 in
France
oil
ensure
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ensures
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 approximately
one third
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one-third
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 of total
energy
. It is conspicuous that in 2000
Total
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the Total
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production
 of
Australia
 and
France
 grew by 70 and 100
percent
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per cent
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 respectively. It is clear from the data that
vast
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the vast
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 majority of
electricity
of
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in
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Australia
 in 2000
received
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was received
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 by utilizing
of
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coal. And only 4
units
 are made
by
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of
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oil
 and natural gas. It could be plainly viewed that in 2000 nuclear power was the main source of
energy
with
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providing
of
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126
units
 from all 180 in
France
. Despite
of
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this
, coal and
oil
used
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are used
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 for
one four
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one-fourth
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 of all
electricity
production
 in
this
 state.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words units, electricity, production, australia, france, energy, oil with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "represents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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