One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is how to teach children to be good member of society. It is undeniable that teaching children has become an essential part of our life

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is how to teach
children
to be good
member
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of society. It is undeniable that teaching
children
has become an essential part of our
life
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.
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there is no absolute agreement on whether
kids
should be learned from their
parents
or from the
school
. A commonly held belief is that
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children
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starts
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from their family, so most people believe that being good
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public
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beginning
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from the family. As evidence of
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they point to when
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was born, they saw their
parents
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. And they try to repeat the movements of their
parents
’.
Furthermore
,
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think it is noticeable that
children
who have problems in the family are mostly aggressive or cannot be talkative with others. It could be explained by the fact that
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kids
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in good relationships with their
parents
are more likely to be successful and cheerful.
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, it leads to
parents
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a main role in the upbringing of their child and relationships between them directly
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to how a
children
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behaves in society.
On the other hand
, some people claim that
school
is the place to learn how to be
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member of society.
For example
, they may mention that
kids
spend more time in
school
and they may feel
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comfortable when they are playing with their friends.
In addition
, scientists believe that people unconsciously repeat the habits and characteristics of those with whom they feel comfortable. The explanation lies in the fact that
kids
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more open with friends than family and mostly they can discuss their experiences with friends.
Therefore
,
kids
also
learn to be fine at
school
. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account
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would argue that both views are true and each of them takes an important role
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kid’s
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life.
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