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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is young people have little leisure time and they are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies.

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One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is young
people
 have little leisure
time
 and they are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. It is undeniable that
study
 has become an essential part of our life.
However
, these days
study
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studying is
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 becoming difficult from
time
 to
time
, and because of what
people
 strive for
the
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they
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 top and forgetting about their personal lives. One of the main aspects of the problem is that most adolescents feel
themselves stressfull
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stressed
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 because of
study
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studying
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 and
by
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comparing
themselve
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themselves
 to the achievements of
other
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their
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 peers. One of the main reasons behind
that is
,
parents
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that parents
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 teach their
child
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children
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 from childhood to be smarter by literally brainwashing them with studies, and
this
 causes young
people
 to feel under
the
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pressure when they are not satisfied with their academic results.
This
 could lead to serious mental problems or might result in
human's
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a human's
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 personality. To tackle
this
 problem
people
 should take a balance
of
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in
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 every sphere of life,
for
instance
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 to
go
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the gym and other extracurricular activities,
relaxing
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relax
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 and things like that.
This
 may be
easiest
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the easiest
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 and so the best way to keep the balance,
just
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take
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to take
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a
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apply
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note of
your
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the
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 things that you need to do, in a word keep
time
 management and use different techniques when you
study
. Having weighed everything mentioned up, we can come to
a
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 conclusion that youngsters should keep their regimen and remind their own personal lives to spend their energy
in
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on
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 useful things. So it would not be
suprising
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surprising
see
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to see
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 some young generation with psychological disorders if continue in the same spirit, in the near future. Actions must be taken urgently,
otherwise
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,otherwise
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 we will get the other side of what we wanted.
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