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The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City Center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant

The chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port City Center from 2003 to 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant
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The line chart provides information about the changes experienced in three fields of crime in New Port City Center between 2003 and 2012. Looking from the
overall
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 perspective it is readily apparent that the number of
bulglary
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burglary
incidents
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 considerably decreased,
while
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 car thefts and robberies were common during the whole period. With regards to the graph, the area with the most significant changes was burglary, beginning with just above 3500
incidents
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 in 2003 and reaching a peak at approximately 3700 in 2004.
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, from 2005 the number was constantly decreasing till 2008 (with nearly 1300 cases per year) and had some miserable fluctuations during the next 4 years.
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 car thefts, there were nearly 2700
incidents
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 from 2003 to 2005, but suddenly the amount went down to 2000 in 2006,
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, plateauing till 2008.
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, the number of
incidents
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 increased to over 2500 in 2010 and was almost the same till 2012.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words incidents with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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