Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Vegan
is one
of the diets
that gained significant popularity lately, especially among the
Correct article usage
apply
health conscious
individuals. Aside Add a hyphen
health-conscious
to
saying no to meat, Change preposition
from
vegan
is Correct your spelling
veganism
one
step further
of
not eating Change preposition
than
animal related
Add a hyphen
animal-related
food
produce
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apply
such
as milk
, butter, etc. This
is the reason many perceive vegan
as healthier and the trend is here to stay. In my opinion, vegan
is not the most beneficial diets
and the reasons will be discussed Fix the agreement mistake
diet
further
.
Firstly
, human being
Fix the agreement mistake
beings
is
omnivores by nature. Wrong verb form
are
This
means we obtain essential nutrients by eating a wide range of food
. For example
meat, not only it is a good source of protein, it has complex vitamin B and minerals. Eating high protein plant
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plants
such
as chickpeas, tofu
might seem Correct word choice
and tofu
Change preposition
like as
as
ideal replacement Correct your spelling
an
to
meat Change preposition
for
however
it is not apples to apples
comparison as animal Correct your spelling
an apples-to-apples
protein
are more complex. Sticking to a highly restrictive diet causes Fix the agreement mistake
proteins
one
to lose essential vitamins that are much
required for our body to function properly. In the long term, Correct quantifier usage
apply
this
could even have adverse impacts to
our health.
As some of the main Change preposition
on
food
options are being removed, consumers will look for alternatives. A classic example would be drinking plant-based milk
instead
of actual cow’s milk
. Supermarket shelves are mushrooming with oat milk
, almond milk
, soy bean
Correct your spelling
soybean
milk
, etc. Though the food
companies promote these milk
as healthier options to cow’s milk
, the fact is they are often loaded with additives and chemicals to have more
appealing taste. Prolonged consumption of chemical additives is no doubt bad for our Add an article
a more
body
. Fix the agreement mistake
bodies
Not to mention
, alternative foods are usually priced higher, this
is a psychology
trick to consumers that these Replace the word
psychological
food
are better.
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foods
However
, there’s
always Wrong verb form
there are
to
two Change preposition
apply
side
to a coin. There are some undeniable benefits of Change to a plural noun
sides
vegan
diet as animal farming produces tonnes of greenhouse gases. These gases trap heat in the air and Add an article
a vegan
contributes
to global warming which ultimately Change the verb form
contribute
destroy
our living environment. Change the verb form
destroys
Besides
that, as more and more people opt for vegan
diet, Add an article
a vegan
the vegan
food
companies might shift from farming animals to growing crops which is more environmental
friendly.
In conclusion, I disagree Change the adjective
environmentally
with
Change preposition
that
vegan
diets
benefits
human Correct subject-verb agreement
benefit
being
the most as there are some obvious drawbacks Replace the word
beings
about
Change preposition
apply
it
. To reap the most fruit, Correct pronoun usage
apply
one
could choose to be on vegan
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a vegan
diets
on Fix the agreement mistake
diet
part-time
basis. Add an article
a part-time
This
approach will balance out the advantages and disadvantageous of being a vegan
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