The diagrams show the structure of the solar panel and its use

The diagrams show the structure of the solar panel and its use
The maps illustrate the process of assembling a solar panel and how one for either
air
or
water
works.
Overall
, there are four steps in the process of warming up
water
and
air
for both types of solar
panel
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panels
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, which can be grouped into two main stages, starting with building the device and ending with warm
air
or
water
. With regard to the construction of the device, a box
which
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that
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is attached with two tubes, acting as an inlet and an outlet, is prepared in advance.
Then
, a transparent top is placed on the box. Turning to the procedure of producing heated
air
, cool
air
goes into the box through the inlet.
Subsequently
, sun rays, which can
also
be called heat energy, warm the transparent
top up
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,
as
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and as
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a
result
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hot
air
is created, after which it leaves the solar panel through the outlet. Meanwhile,
water
also
experiences a similar proceeding with the exception of the transparent top being replaced by a
water
pipe.
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