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the most important aim science should be to improve peoples lives. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

#aim #science #peoples #lives #statment
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It is undeniable that
science
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 is a powerful tool that can alter our reality in ways that were once unimaginable.
While
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 Some
people
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, including myself, believe that the ultimate goal of
science
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 should be to improve
people
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’s
lives
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, others may argue that
science
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 has other goals that are equally or more important. First of all, it is wise to allocate limited resources and mitigate their usage to serve humanity.
This
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 is because
science
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 essentially aims at promoting progress for humans and other living beings. Medical research,
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, has led to the development of life-saving treatments and cures for many diseases, which has improved the quality of life for millions of
people
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. If,
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, the aim of
science
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 is merely pursuing advanced knowledge out of curiosity rather than targeting human welfare, there would be a serious shortage of natural and financial resources devoted to the prosperity of
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 race, as they will be wasted on scientific breakthroughs of exploring the unknown.
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, technology is the application of scientific knowledge to improve
people
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's
lives
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.
In other words
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, the usage of computer systems and the internet is currently indispensable for diverse aspects,
for instance
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, online learning, university enrollment and even online shopping. If,
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, technology is used exclusively for entertainment purposes that might be distracting for learners and workers.
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, if
people
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 are using technology for the benefit of entertainment rather than improving their
lives
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 they may encounter detrimental impacts and be less
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be less productive. In conclusion, despite there may be other goals of
science
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such
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 as advancing knowledge to explore the unknown and entertainment purposes, it is my firm belief that refining individuals'
lives
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 should undoubtedly be one of the most vital aims.
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