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Describe a family member who you want to work with in the future You should say: Who he/she is Whether you worked together before What kind of work you would like to do with him/her Explain how you feel about this family member

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Well, if I had to choose someone whom I would like to work with in the future, it would definitely be my
mother
. I love my
mother
 from the deepest core of my heart. She is the person I can share everything with and that's the reason I adore her so much. She is cheerful, attractive, and optimistic. She is simply gorgeous with a bright and charming skin colour and slim body. Mom and I have never worked together, but to be honest, she is the most intelligent woman I've ever met. I mean she's sharp, really sharp. She's pretty sociable but very focused. She worked as a university lecturer before and retired
last
 year. Anyway, if I can set up my own business, I definitely want to invite her as a strategic consultant for me because I have always trusted her. With thirty years of teaching experience in the field of economics, I believe she will be the best choice to help me achieve success. The reason I admire and love her so much is that she is talented, and caring so loves everyone. I feel extremely proud of her
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 because she deserved her life to do well. She is an ideal
mother
 who raised two children and ensured our quality education and moral values. She has sacrificed a lot and has never complained about anything to us. It was a delight to become a son of someone who was both talented and enjoyable to be around, and I'm happy to have
such
 a
mother
!
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