Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage money . Others argues that it is better to try and improve such situation. Discuss both these views and give own opinion.

Nowadays,with so many
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in the
humans
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circumstance during their
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, some nation argues that they have to accept their life
work
and their less
money
.Others believe that they have to develop their living life to go forward for better a
hanit
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hand
habit
conditions.
This
essay will shed light
both
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views and
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will give my
opin
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opinion
the conclusion.
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the first view, being
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familiar person with all
over
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apply
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a bad situation
it
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is
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consider
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considers
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the best
way
to
to
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success in
you
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job
as well.
However
,
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unsatisfactory in jobs means that not able to accomplish any
work
in a perfect
way
.
Also
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,Also
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it means the worker will not able to like to go to
work
and make communicate with others staff
as a result
will not hain any benefit from
this
job
.It is the same
way
when
people
do not have enough
money
they must show their
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to
forgot
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about it.
For instance
, when a teacher
do
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does
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not like his
job
as
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of
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teching
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teaching
students as will be not able to
work
perfect
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perfectly
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and
to
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arrive
the
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information in a proper
way
.
On the other hand
,the second point of view
that
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some nation argues that it is better to discover and develop
such
situations.
In addition
,
people
must
works
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work
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hard even if they are not familiar with the
job
because it
make
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makes
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a sense of passion,
ambitious
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and improvement to go forward as well.
Wherever when
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people
try to
work
hard and establish their own business they will gain
alot
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a lot
of experience
wich
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which
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qualify
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qualifies
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him
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them
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to do strong in their
job
and gain
money
that
assist
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assists
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him
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them
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in their life.
For example
; some
people
when they are not
satisfactor
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satisfied with
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their
job
and
they
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do not have enough
money
as well they start to establish new
own
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project
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projects
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even
restaurant
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restaurants
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,
Cafe
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cafes
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or small
shop
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shops
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.
To conclude
,
people
who
being
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acceptable
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accepting
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with
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apply
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unsatisfactory
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the unsatisfactory
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job
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jobs
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they
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are
a
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powerful as they do not have enough
money
and
still
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are still
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happiest
while
other
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others
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prefer to
working
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work
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hard and improve themselves.In my
opinion
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,opinion
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both options are good but
being improve
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improving
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your self
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yourself
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in
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apply
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all over
lives
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life
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satage
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stage
consider
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considered
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as
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apply
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a comfortable choice for most
people
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Contentment
  • Resilience
  • Personal growth
  • Endurance
  • Initiative
  • Advancement
  • Catalyst
  • Financial stability
  • Status quo
  • Innovation
  • Missed opportunities
  • Life satisfaction
  • Adverse situations
  • Taking control
  • Risk assessment
  • Change management
  • Self-improvement
  • Motivation
  • Stagnation
  • Proactivity
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