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Many people think that museums and art galleries should only show work from local artists rather than work from other countries. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The creativity level of the
artists
 has burgeoned in the past. Versatility in
this
 field has provoked
artists
 to do something different than before. I do not opine on the above notion, and a concrete answer is given below which supports my saying. To start with,
art
 galleries and museums are creativity hubs. Diversity in paintings and collections
reflect
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 the rising inner passion of today's generation, but, is it valid to promote foreign talent over local
artists
? A
schools
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school
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 of thought suggest that these ventures should only display work done by the natives.
Firstly
, if
this
 criterion is implemented, visitors or buyers would not be able to get
an
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apply
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exposure
of
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to
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 foreign paintings and sculptures.
Secondly
,
due to
 these restrictions, competition among the local people will proliferate,
however
, they will not be able to compete on an international level.
Such
 visitor attractions should be presented in a way that local and international
artifacts
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 are put up in different sections
at
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 one place.
Also
,
this
 will lead to an increase in competition among local players. What's more, the visitors will get an essence of the international market trends as well.
For instance
,
art
 festivals in Dubai
such
 as "Global Village" are the biggest possible events as they promote both foreign and local
artists
 and attract a lot of tourists.
To conclude
, museums and galleries should promote work from other countries so that a better benchmark for local
artists
 will be set and people who love
art
 will get a better idea of
art
 all around the world.
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