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Some people argue that competitive sports are good for bringing together people from different cultures. Others argue that these sports can cause problems and increase conflicts between nations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Competitive
sports
 are a significant issue happening in the world. Individuals think
sports
 get the population who come from different aspects of the world to know each other. At the same time, others think these
sports
 will cause trouble in communities. In my opinion, competitive
sports
 have essential impacts on all nations. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views. In the beginning,
sports
 were an important issue in society.
In addition
, young
people
 use these
sports
 to present their skills.
For example
, the younger generation when they play football with another team start to do exercises long months before. They want to achieve their goal and win the competition.
Furthermore
, in
this
 case, the
people
 who win will become more famous and get perspective from others.
In addition
, when other
people
 come from another nation they will use different facilities so their income will increase.
On the other hand
, some
people
 think these
sports
 may cause problems and that happens rarely when
people
 don't have a
sports
 soul. Some
people
 may hit each other and broking places and things. In conclusion, competitive
sports
 have many advantages and good impact
as well as
 fewer negatives. In fact, everything in the world has both sides but we should see significant things and ignore the bad side.
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