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Mordern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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Over the
last
 few decades, technological improvements have developed at the speed of light and it has tremendous potential in our life including downloading e-books and multimedia in a short period. Some people believe it is a negative development for the new generation,
while
 others are opposed to it.
However
, I think it has more positive outcomes
due to
 several particular reasons, which should be considered seriously, and the following paragraphs will expatiate both stances with lucid examples. To commence, the first and foremost reason is that people can get the needed information without any restrictions by surfing the websites. To explain
further
, students need various e-books to make assignments and to crack exams, but they don't have enough money to buy different authors.
Thus
, it is one of the cheapest methods for students after the library to achieve their goals in life
such
 as becoming a doctor, lawyer etc.
Secondly
, a nation can save their waiting time for libraries by getting free online pdf. To illustrate my view, people are having a cat and mouse race to read some books
such
 as "Rich Dad and Poor Dad" to increase their knowledge in life.
Hence
, by saving books they can save time.
Moreover
, the next most significant reason for free music downloads is, in
this
 fast-paced world, lots of public rejuvenate themselves
while
 listening to songs, and watching movies without paying any money.
Therefore
,
this
 would be helpful for them as
this
 is more efficient and available. Turning to the other side of the argument, some humans believe
this
 is one of the main reasons why young generations are more attached to adult movies and videos because of no restrictions, which is not good for their health and mental development.
To conclude
, there is no doubt that it has a few bad effects on human beings
such
 as watching porn movies at an early age
besides
 it has more positive factors like candidates can prepare for higher education, read books, and enjoy multimedia without even paying a penny.
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