The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

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of a public
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that there are many
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in
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area and corner of the
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there
is
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two entrances
which
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one located in the south called ARNOLD
AVENEU
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AVENUE
and
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other
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another
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in the south named ELDON STREET.
According to
the
the
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firt
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first
plane,
stage
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for
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replaced
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by
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for
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concerts
which allows people to do several
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there.
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,
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garden which was
in
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two sites
in
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the left and right of the
park
now
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in
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the
westernorth
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western side
of the
park
.Wherever
,
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setting places had been changed in the middle of the public entertainment.
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,
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is added to the new designs of the
park
so, it can serve visitors during their time of meals.
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,
other
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area
were
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replaced which
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children’s
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play area and it is
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point to
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this
space where kids can have fun.
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,
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changed
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by
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garden with more seats
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it to make visitors enjoy watching the beautiful colours of flowers.And glasshouse
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replaced by
water
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feature which gives a beautiful view of imagination
mixure
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mixture
. One notable point is that
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underground car
park
is added in
todays
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design of the
park
which
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the best facility in the
park
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alterations
  • renovations
  • modernize
  • upgraded
  • transformed
  • landscaping
  • facilities
  • amenities
  • preservation
  • heritage
  • green spaces
  • eco-friendly
  • public space
  • community impact
  • historical elements
  • conservation
  • recreational areas
  • urban planning
  • sustainable development
  • layout
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