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Currently, many people fail to balance the work with the other parts of lives. What are the reasons and how to solve it?

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It is often that people can't balance
work
 and
another activity
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other activities
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 in life for many reasons ,in
this
 essay I will try to suggest some solutions. There are many people suffering from
this
 problem,and some people have to
work
 full time ,
Moreover
,some jobs need
work
 out of time
work
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.
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for
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, teachers need proper for lessons at home , Another conspicuous reason is exhaustion during the day makes the employment lose the the desire of do other activity like sports or going outdoor.
Additionally
, many companies give them other tasks to complete at home . So, for that
reasons
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i
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 suggest some solutions that could have benefits and a good impact on both the individual and the company or government situation,first and most,
then
 reduce the period of
work
 in stance the time should be twelve
hour
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 every day ,
secondly
, It should be
long
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 vacation for worker t being more created and active and can do other things they prefer . To summarize,the government should play a vital role in
this
 way to keep the residents motivated and beneficial to society and cosy with their lives.
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