the graph below show the sales of children's books, adult fiction books and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons when relevant.

the graph below show the sales of children's books, adult fiction books and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons when relevant.
The line graph illustrates the incomes from three different categories of
books
over the period of 2002 and 2006 in one country.
Overall
,
children’s
books
had the highest
sales
, whilst educational
books
had the lowest
sales
throughout the given time. Between 2002 and 2003, both
children’s
and educational
books
saw a steady increase in
sales
, going from nearly 32 to 42
million
dollars
for
children’s
book
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books
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and from approximately 25 to 31
million
dollars
for educational
book’s
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books
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. Adult fiction had the largest profits in 2002, with nearly 45
million
dollars
. But a slight decline
by
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of
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about 10
million
was observed in the following year,
made
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making
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adult fiction lose its first place for
children’s
books
. There was a gradual increase in the income from
children’s
books
till 2005, after that the
sales
dramatically rose and reached a high of 55
million
dollars
in 2006, making it the highest-selling category of
books
. Whilst for adult fiction there was a slight increment in
sales
between 2003 and 2004. Following that the
sales
saw a significant decline and hit a trough of 30
million
dollars
in 2006. As for educational
books
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,books
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the profits showed a continuous decrease and plunged
at
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to
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approximately 28
million
in 2005. The
sales
improved slightly in the following year and reached
little
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a little
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above 30
million
dollars
.
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