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in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Advanced technologies and many
humans innovation
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 have enabled our civilization to have a more convenient life. In spite of the evolution, many people around the
world
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 still go hungry. I think
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 phenomenon is caused by the uneven distribution of resources and
education
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. But, these
problems
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 can be solved by allocating each nation's wealth to
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 and science programmes and avoiding
corruption
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. The unfair distribution of resources in a nation, particularly foodstuffs, can lead to
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national hunger because people in remote places are not able to access and harvest them.
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, locals in Papua are experiencing extremely expensive prices for food because they do not have the seeds nor the knowledge to plant and grow them.
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, they
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 do not have the ability to innovate by themselves because they do not have access to
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 higher
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 needed
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 the distance from the nearest big city. In short, the lack of knowledge and infrastructure are making them unable to fulfil their own food and nutrition.
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, there are many solutions to these
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 as focusing a nation's cash on humanity programmes and avoiding evil
corruption
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. By supplying more money to science and
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 stuff, people inhabiting remote islands can learn things that are important to produce their own food.
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, strictly punishing corruptors is a very effective way to save money and gain more funds to educate children and youngsters.
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, if lots of assets are invested in teaching and educating infrastructure and accompanied by the absence of
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, the problem of
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 hunger will have been solved in 10 years.
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, there are
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 experienced by the
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 right now, uneven allocation of knowledge and supplies that leads to
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 hunger,
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, by implementing strict regulations against
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 and investing lots of pennies in schooling, those
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 can be annihilated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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